Komainu - [01] Jūken | fin

[Hyūga Komainu]

Technique Name:

Yogen: Hangeki | Divination: Counterstroke

Technique's Label: Personal
Technique Prerequisites: None
Rank: D-rank
Type: Taijutsu, Kekkei Genkai, Hiden
Elemental Nature:None
Speed of Technique: None
Description:

The first of a set of techniques inspired by her liege, this technique combines strength with instantaneous movement to comprise an enemy's assault. Once an attack enters her field of divination, Komainu will strike either one or both of her hands to redirect and/or disrupt the attack. By applying chakra, the technique can be made even more effective. The stance for this technique is the reverse of the regular stance.

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Technique Name:

Yogen: Tsugimenashi no Mai | Divination: Seamless Dance

Technique's Label: Personal
Technique Prerequisites: None
Rank: C
Type: Taijutsu, Hiden
Elemental Nature:None
Speed of Technique: None
Description:

Combining flexibility with high-speed movement, Komainu works up a spin similar to "Hakkeshō Kaiten", striking away at any enemies within her field of divination using her Gentle Fist style. Throughout the spin, she can also move around, closing the distant within her field of divination in an instant. With fluid and swift strikes that are difficult to track, the technique carries the appearance of a perfect dance without flaws, hence the name. The stance for this technique puts the hands above the hips with the palms facing outward.

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Technique Name:

Yogen: Zenchi | Divination: Omniscience

Technique's Label: Personal
Technique Prerequisites: None
Rank: B
Type: Taijutsu, Kekkei Genkai, Hiden
Elemental Nature:None
Speed of Technique: None
Description:

This technique causes everything inside Komainu's field of divination to slow down, severely. This allows her to see and perceive and react to any and everything within that field. In reality, nothing really slows down. Instead, it is Komainu who is moving faster as a result of chakra stimulation. This technique's stance is a deep breath followed by placing the hands in front of the stomach with the palms toward the ground.

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Technique Name:

Jūho: Gaishū | Gentle Step: Armored-Sleeve

Technique's Label: Personal
Technique Prerequisites: None
Rank: D-rank
Type: Taijutsu, Kekkei Genkai, Hiden
Elemental Nature:None
Speed of Technique: None
Description:

This technique releases two, consecutive bursts of chakra from the body instead of one, granting Komainu the ability to inflict massive damage in one hit. Using the second burst to further aggravate and strike the area wounded by the first burst, this techniique effectively increases the damage of a single hit several times over.

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Technique Name:

Jūkenpō: Tsuinho | Gentle Fist Art: Twin Step

Technique's Label: Personal
Technique Prerequisites: None
Rank: D
Type: Taijutsu, Hiden
Elemental Nature:None
Speed of Technique: None
Description:

This is a movement technique with an effective an effective range of five yards. Focusing on only two, identical steps, Komainu can cover the technique's range in under a second. Each step maximize muscle strength and joint strength and coordination, the second step carrying Komainu further than the first by virtue of kinetic energy.

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[Hyūga Komainu]

Ready for Review

[Berugu Kosui]

+ Yogen: Hangeki | Divination: Counterstroke

Dispersing incoming jutsu with a D-rank technique is a bit implausible. I'd say bump it up to C or edit that part out.

+Yogen: Tsugimenashi no Mai | Divination: Seamless Dance

Instant movement (even if just closing distances) + Being able to freely move around mid-spin is a bit much given its rank. Bump it up or pick one or the other. Also, your last sentence is unfinished.

+Yogen: Zenchi | Divination: Omniscience

Getting into Sharingan territory with this technique. What exactly is making her move faster (chakra to the feet, etc.), and how would that translate to everything moving slower in her field of vision?

+Jūho: Gaishū | Gentle Step: Armored-Sleeve

Keep in mind the extra chakra usage for this one, haven't looked at your profile to see your reserves but probably won't be able to use this too many times in a single fight.

[Hyūga Komainu]

Well, that's one of the basic quirks of Jūken as Neji revealed against Kidomaru, but it's been removed as not to get in the way.

Actually, it's not. I've moved in mid spin plenty of times and I'm nowhere near a professional dancer. A ninja would be able to do this with no problem. Also, if you've seen the eight trigrams techniques in action (the cannon ones) you'll see that they involve increased speed within the field of divination, to the point where the technique is unavoidable. That is what this is based off of, and Sixty-Four Palms is also C-rank here, so it's not as extreme as it may seem.

I have no explanation for it. You would have to see the Neji vs Kidomaru fight for that one (particularly when he used the One-Hundred Twenty-Four Palms), but it is possible.

[Berugu Kosui]

Ok, that explanation helped. It can stay as is, but I still need an explanation for Omniscience as to what makes her move faster.

[Hyūga Komainu]

I'll put chakra as the cause. Also, I have finished that sentenced (forgot to do it before).

[Berugu Kosui]

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