Custom Jutsu - Personal

[Namikaze Tsuki]

Technique Name:

[Kyūkyoku no bōei] | [Defensive Stance]

Technique's Label: [Personal]
Technique Prerequisites: [Kenjutsu]
Rank: B
Type: [Kenjutsu/Taijutsu]
Description:

The Kyūkyoku no bōei, or Half Step is based on an ancient martial arts principle saying that any attack can be dodged as long as the user has at space for at least half a step. It is used to defend against attacks delivered to the outside of the body, which can be implemented by either using weapons or hands as well as some ninjutsu based attacks. The defense also serves as the foundation for other techniques and develops peripheral awareness. Doing this requires you keep your body in motion at all times using your arms or weapons to defend different angles of attack. The trick is to keep your arms or weapons at an oblique angle so you don't take an blow head on. Each blow is deflected down the angle of the forearm or weapon, reducing the impact damage. The 360 degree defense should become an instinctual reflex in defending attacks at various angles to the outside of the body. At the most proficient level, simultaneous and follow up counter-attacks are executed to neutralize the threat.

This is most effective if the user has a higher reaction time than his/her opponent though it is greatly diminished if they are facing someone physically superior.

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Technique Name:

[Raihari] | [Needles]

Technique's Label: Personal
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Elemental Nature: Raiton
Speed of Technique: 6
Description:

The user will cover his body or body part in sharp electric needles which he can then release towards the opponent. Although the needles deal no damage, they travel at incredibly fast speeds. When hit they simply paralyze the opponent's limb they hit for 1 post

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• From my understanding anything made invisible needs to be at least A rank.
  
• [Raihari] | [Needles]- You need the kunai speed for this and at D rank it should not be more than 3 and 10 secs is a long time for a D rank.
  
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[The Reaper]

I'd like to see a percentage on your last technique of how much chakra (percentage) is consumed per post.

[Namikaze Tsuki]

Edited

[Me]

Hm:

[1] | Not entire sure on the first one. I hope physical superior means faster and stronger, but why does this deal with Kenjutsu? It's like a copy of many Manga-Like Martial Arts with the hand, and you describe a majority of the hand section with nothing relating to the weapon section. Also, how does the half-step and the erratic hand movements combine? Seem like two different things to me in all honesty. Also, what do you mean outside of the body? Outside the opponents guard or something? Clarify.

[2] | No. I'mma say this require a specialization to Non-Elemental Jutsu, simply cause turning an object invisible is insane. Not to mention, an addition that one must always stay in contact with the weapon or object, and if contact it removed and chakra isn't always implanted in it to sustain invisibility, it'll turn back to visible.

[3] | 10 Seconds. Place a Post-Timing. Also, incredibly fast isn't 4x Kunai, it's around 6x and onwards. I made a technique similar to this one, so i won't judge, however this one, i would like if it appears from your mouth and not appear on your body.

[4] | I would deny on the standing of Pseudo-RnY, however, i can deny on the basis its irrelevant and unneeded. Shunshin no jutsu accomplishes this and has no speed boost. Also, you contradict yourself in an attempt to vary it from RnY, it increases natural movement, other speed jutsu, while it doesn't augment speed. See.

[5] | This would most likely never work. One. Combining elements into a single blade would require chakra flow into the blade itself, and as we know, Fuuton Cancels out Raiton, so it's like trying to send fire through a corridor and then as the fire is filling it, water and hoping it combines, but it'll just cancel each other out into steam - a new form. It'll backfire with an impossibility ratio. So i'll have to say, no.

[Namikaze Tsuki]

How about short and too point instead of writing an essay?

1 - I have no idea what you mean because of your random babbling... Combines half step dodge with knowing an area around yourself to be able to dodge/block jutsu either with a hand or a sword. Doesn't take a genius to understand that.

2 - There is no Non-Elemental specialization. Tough luck goes under ninjutsu. and duhh the constant contact is needed goes without saying.

3 -I made it slower but with the entire body, instead of faster and just mouth. Also i don't like the aftertaste of Raiton. And I don't care if you made a similar technique wo why bother mentioning it?

4 - Its nothing like RnY. And I don't care what shuunshin does, its nothing like it either. Just because 2 jutsu stun or burn that doesn't make them the same.

5 - Do you even read? One inside of the blade while the other around it. The two types don't go near each other. And it wouldn't backfire, because why would it?

[Me]

I apologize for my way of reviewing, but i can honestly say, nothing i say is random babbling and pertains to your application in one form or another, if you're incapable of seeing that, it only vindicates my assumption that you yourself don't fully understand your techniques. I apologize for the previous tone, but it was needed to be said.

[1] | My, what you call, random babbling is not nonsense, and it holds within it the key to your edits or approval. If you can't comprehend my writing, then ask me to clarify, but before you do that, be sure to ANSWER all my questions and see if the edits are correct. I won't touch this technique until all my questions have been addressed, so please do that now.

[2] | So i assume this means you think i don't know my own systems? There is a Specialization of Non-Elemental Jutsu, it goes like this B-Rank+[Non-Elemental]. Please read up my rules before questioning my words, if you won't do that, i say you can leave now.

[3] | A comparison between techniques on the forum gives a good baseline, so if two techniques are the same, or almost the same - as ours are - then it can be a good way to distinguish limits. Similar to how we compare custom techs to canon techs. If you don't know this, then i'm utterly sorry for this.

[3b] | Up the technique to C-Rank, any technique that's offensive or defensive is considered an C-Rank or above technique. Remove the mention of it being "incredibly" fast, especially as it is only 4x Kunai speed which is relatively slower than most techniques that don't even mention being "incredibly" fast. Paralysis, for such a technique, will only cause paralysis to the hit section, such as arms or legs, unless you're going to up it to B-Rank, which will allow it to affect the entire body in one hit, like other Raiton Techniques do.

[4] | Because you rename a technique and reword a technique, it doesn't mean it does anything different than another technique. If it accomplishes the same feat, then it accomplishes the same feat. So i apologize, but Officially Denied. Please adjust your tone when talking to me from here on out.

[5] | Whether around or inside, chakra flow is the same, it would null the moment one comes into contact with the other, or the one around it would be two separate chakra flow dominated by the outside element without the effects the inside working, making the technique pointless. Officially Denied.

[Namikaze Tsuki]

1 - What were your questions? [This time short and to point please.]

2 - Fine. No tech then. And I'll remember for further notice that all invisibility must be a Non- Elemental specialization.

3 - This was a pointless piece of information that didn't help me with the technique at all.

3b - finally some information.

4 - So no speed increasing techniques at all just because they do the same thing as RnY? No jutsu that shoot Katon out of the user's mouth because there already is one? Fine.

Also this entire app was already being reviewed by Hiko. I have asked you before to look over which you chose to ignore, and only now that someone else started it, you decide to butt in. Way to trust your mods!

[Namikaze Tsuki]

Also - Re-worded the Shiver jutsu. Now it just allows the user to accelerate to fluctuate from 0-top speed instantly instead of boosting their movement. RnY does not allow that.

[Me]

Re-Read my reviews and make the said edits, removals, and answer the questions.

I will check it then.

[Me]

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